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For writing this week we ate Hokey Pokey and writ about it.First I had to make a success criteria, a success criteria is your goal for your writing. I did a description and I used the 5 census, the 5 census are look, hear, felt, smelled and tasted.
Hey there my name is Connor from South Hornby School and I like how you added wow words in your writing and lots of words to described hooky pokey. Next time you could maybe add some photos.
Thanks Jacob, I loved reading your description of Hokey Pokey. You have used wonderful WOW words and painted a picture in my head about what it tastes like. I remember Mrs Jack bringing the hokey pokey for us to try, it was devine! I wonder if you could think of a simile about the word crunch?
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Hey there my name is Connor from South Hornby School and I like how you added wow words in your writing and lots of words to described hooky pokey. Next time you could maybe add some photos.
ReplyDeleteThanks Jacob, I loved reading your description of Hokey Pokey. You have used wonderful WOW words and painted a picture in my head about what it tastes like. I remember Mrs Jack bringing the hokey pokey for us to try, it was devine! I wonder if you could think of a simile about the word crunch?
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